Anders had a real temper problem that got him killed but as everything slows down you see his life flash before his eyes. Seeing everything that happened to him. As he sees everything about his life that lead to who he became, seeing happiness, life, death, misery all that he had experience all coming back to him one last time before he faded away.
It's pretty interesting how the story goes in such detail about Anders' flashback of his life as the bullet slowly penetrates his brain compared to what's happening at the bank. It was Anders' inability to keep his mouth shut that resulted in this, but the specific memory that he remembers pretty much showed what type of person he is.
This story kick in pretty fast. First page showed us a lot about Anders with his temper then second page the robbery is happening. I think my favorite part was the description of the bullet going through his brain. I like how it showed what parts the bullet went, which gave me a better visual.
“What did you do? Its smells odd like tea with something.” “What did I do? Not much really, I'm only going to finish what I call a part of warm nature. Also, hi.” “You've been staring at the knife in your hand shaking so much? I could tell its not the cold from outside.” “What knife? This? Ah, it's my grandmothers hunting knife. I used it a few minutes ago. Heh, it’s amazing how many times she has saved me. I’m sure what you think I did was bad, but its what anyone would do in my position so its nothing serious.” “Oh really? Then what are those stains on your coat?” “Ketchup, I finally had a good breakfast this morning. I think I can save some for you if you want. You know, you weren't around for days so what was I supposed to do?” “You know there’s none here especially so out here in Alaska.” “Huh, I thought there was. Okay, I know what you are going to say, but I only had to get one dog. Thats it. You have like twelve good runners right? Consider yourself lucky. I had to live without the fish reserves since it got into the snow covered fridge outside and there hasn't been much fish to fish. The berries went by really fast. Those big salmon boats came in and destroyed it for everyone this year and made me and nature desperate. The lake is frozen and I had nothing else to eat or shoot. The rifle broke before I could kill it so I had to do it with this knife.” “Wait, you didn't." "It was a big mess at first, sure. I’m not an expert at cutting skin but I got better at it after working it alittle. I finally got the golden one steady by holding the leash. After that it was easy. You can follow me to the backyard if you want to see- “Y-you got the golden one?! She was going to have pups! “ “I know, but-” “Then-then why would you do such a thing!? I could have sold each one of them for 2000 and get out of this mess!” “I know, she was really good though.” “I've had it with you! I hired you to take care of them while I was gone!” “I know, and I’m sorry.” “Get out!” “By the way, when the golden one got loose it made such a good distraction. I still can’t believe it. The way she zig-zagged you should have seen it leading the way right to me. It was a challenge getting her leash after. I’ve never had bear before today, you wanna’ try it?”
This story was written in a very unique manner. I've never really read anything that described what the person was thinking about, or what really mattered to them in life. It was also intriguing to hear the description of the bullet traveling through his brain.
Comment by Travis Mossbarger It was an interesting story when it came to the parts of what Andres laughed at and the detail about the bullet going through the brain. I did start getting just reading and going wait what am I reading when they described the ceiling. It was odd to read about what he actually thought about compared to what he did not think about while dying.
A humans final thoughts have been a brain teaser of mine from time to time. Who would of thought that a brain could scatter its memories in such a manner as was portrayed in this story? I have always thought final thoughts of life would be subtle and short. Anders was shot in the head, most of the time that is an instant kill.
Anders got himself killed through acting overly sarcastic and not taking the situation very seriously. It happened all of a sudden with him getting shot and all but I think the more interesting part of the story is that he remembers parts of his life and then again he does not remember the important parts. Only the seemingly random and meaningless memories were his last.
Its sad that Anders got shot as he seemed like a very smart individual. Even though he got himself shot for not keeping his mouth shut. The most interesting part is the memories he sees after getting shot. His chosen memories show what kind of individual he is. He seemed like he left out all the bad and took the good with him.
Anders had a real temper problem that got him killed but as everything slows down you see his life flash before his eyes. Seeing everything that happened to him. As he sees everything about his life that lead to who he became, seeing happiness, life, death, misery all that he had experience all coming back to him one last time before he faded away.
ReplyDeleteIt's pretty interesting how the story goes in such detail about Anders' flashback of his life as the bullet slowly penetrates his brain compared to what's happening at the bank. It was Anders' inability to keep his mouth shut that resulted in this, but the specific memory that he remembers pretty much showed what type of person he is.
ReplyDeleteThis story kick in pretty fast. First page showed us a lot about Anders with his temper then second page the robbery is happening. I think my favorite part was the description of the bullet going through his brain. I like how it showed what parts the bullet went, which gave me a better visual.
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteDayanna Castellanos
ReplyDeleteShort Story: Dialogue
“What did you do? Its smells odd like tea with something.”
“What did I do? Not much really, I'm only going to finish what I call a part of warm nature. Also, hi.”
“You've been staring at the knife in your hand shaking so much? I could tell its not the cold from outside.”
“What knife? This? Ah, it's my grandmothers hunting knife. I used it a few minutes ago. Heh, it’s amazing how many times she has saved me. I’m sure what you think I did was bad, but its what anyone would do in my position so its nothing serious.”
“Oh really? Then what are those stains on your coat?”
“Ketchup, I finally had a good breakfast this morning. I think I can save some for you if you want. You know, you weren't around for days so what was I supposed to do?”
“You know there’s none here especially so out here in Alaska.”
“Huh, I thought there was. Okay, I know what you are going to say, but I only had to get one dog. Thats it. You have like twelve good runners right? Consider yourself lucky. I had to live without the fish reserves since it got into the snow covered fridge outside and there hasn't been much fish to fish. The berries went by really fast. Those big salmon boats came in and destroyed it for everyone this year and made me and nature desperate. The lake is frozen and I had nothing else to eat or shoot. The rifle broke before I could kill it so I had to do it with this knife.”
“Wait, you didn't."
"It was a big mess at first, sure. I’m not an expert at cutting skin but I got better at it after working it alittle. I finally got the golden one steady by holding the leash. After that it was easy. You can follow me to the backyard if you want to see-
“Y-you got the golden one?! She was going to have pups! “
“I know, but-”
“Then-then why would you do such a thing!? I could have sold each one of them for 2000 and get out of this mess!”
“I know, she was really good though.”
“I've had it with you! I hired you to take care of them while I was gone!”
“I know, and I’m sorry.”
“Get out!”
“By the way, when the golden one got loose it made such a good distraction. I still can’t believe it. The way she zig-zagged you should have seen it leading the way right to me. It was a challenge getting her leash after. I’ve never had bear before today, you wanna’ try it?”
This story was written in a very unique manner. I've never really read anything that described what the person was thinking about, or what really mattered to them in life. It was also intriguing to hear the description of the bullet traveling through his brain.
ReplyDeleteComment by Travis Mossbarger
ReplyDeleteIt was an interesting story when it came to the parts of what Andres laughed at and the detail about the bullet going through the brain. I did start getting just reading and going wait what am I reading when they described the ceiling. It was odd to read about what he actually thought about compared to what he did not think about while dying.
A humans final thoughts have been a brain teaser of mine from time to time. Who would of thought that a brain could scatter its memories in such a manner as was portrayed in this story? I have always thought final thoughts of life would be subtle and short. Anders was shot in the head, most of the time that is an instant kill.
ReplyDeleteAnders got himself killed through acting overly sarcastic and not taking the situation very seriously. It happened all of a sudden with him getting shot and all but I think the more interesting part of the story is that he remembers parts of his life and then again he does not remember the important parts. Only the seemingly random and meaningless memories were his last.
ReplyDeleteIts sad that Anders got shot as he seemed like a very smart individual. Even though he got himself shot for not keeping his mouth shut. The most interesting part is the memories he sees after getting shot. His chosen memories show what kind of individual he is. He seemed like he left out all the bad and took the good with him.
ReplyDeletevery informative article you share with us http://awriter.org/
ReplyDelete